An open letter to Internet Trolls,
Here at Cold Brood, I always welcome comments and feedback. I eat constructive criticism for breakfast, lunch, and dinner.
However, if your goal is to leave disruptive, rude, or otherwise stupid comments please understand they will be deleted. This blog is my face on the Web and if you insist on spitting on it, well, I'll just wipe it off. Yes! Do you hear me? I WILL WIPE IT OFF!
Of course the natural reaction would then be to spit in the face of the offending commenter, but no. Because here on the Web, people can hide themselves under that uber-generic ANONYMOUS. Posting as ANONYMOUS is absolutely welcome as long as it's constructive. I love the comments left by all the lovely ANONYMICE. But if you're just going to post mindless drivel under that moniker, you are nothing short of a coward. Plain and simple.
Here's the thing -- if you don't like the content of this blog, don't read it. And if you get some perverse pleasure out of throwaway, uncreative, drive-by commenting in the pre-dawn hours when your life seems meaningless please do yourself a favor and find that meaning. Here are a few suggestions:
1. Sniff glue. It won't damage your brain anymore than it already is.
2. Try cordless bungee jumping.
3. Drink a glass of paint thinner. That'll clear up the constipation that's got you in such a mood.
4. Skinny dip in hydrochloric acid.
5. Start your own blog so that I can post comments on it. As myself, not crawling little grub.
6. If you're still feeling ignorant, read this then feel free to bring it on. With the latest in Google Analytics, it won't be hard to pinpoint your location; those maps are detailed.
Oh, look at you! You took your wrist-slap like a perfect little trolly-angel.
You are dismissed. Go nurse your hangover.
Cold Brood
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Thursday, May 24, 2012
A Slap on the Wrist for Trolly!
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Wednesday, May 9, 2012
Dear Editor: edit THIS!
As a writer who depends upon editors to buy my work, I know this post is playing with fire. I'll take my chances.
Often during my 'Net browsing, I'll come across some small press editor or other's blog which I eagerly devour. Invariably, I can depend on finding that obligatory post in which said editor or other denigrates, belittles, or otherwise condemns the hopeful writers who anxiously submit their work for review only to ultimately be rejected. Hours of clattering away at a keyboard (not to mention even more hours revising draft after draft) before finally clicking SEND on that fateful email, only to wait three months (or more) for a form rejection letter really, well, sucks.
But, hey -- that's the industry. I am a professional. I possess the thick skin that is required while awaiting the inevitable rejection...after rejection...after rejection. I have never once replied in anger to an editor who has rejected my work. I accept that not everything I write is perfect (some of it is downright despicable) and I accept that even good stories sometimes get shot down. John Steinbeck was said to have been rejected over 75 times before a single word he wrote found print and Mark Twain a jaw-dropping 200 times. It just makes the occasional acceptance all the sweeter.
Further, I understand that an enormous cross-section of people who think they can write well actually cannot and a large subset of this group may by extension also be classified as unprofessional. I empathize with an editor's frustration when a writer submits piles of pure slush or responds to rejection with bitterness or outright malice. As a one-time editor myself, believe me -- I know.
Now let me turn the tables. What follows is an actual reply I received from an editor recently. I am including it here without any retouching. Please note: I'm not picking on editors. Most of my interactions with them have been wonderful learning experiences (especially those of you who currently have a story of mine under consideration. Heh.). Obviously, I am withholding said editor's name. I just couldn't ignore posting this. Read on to see why:
i read some and scanned the rest
you have to tweak it to make it fit more of what i am looking
for.
1. stop beginning words with AND. never a good thing
2. make the dialogue more standard format. way to much slang and
sloppy writing (i know thats the style but i dont like it)
3. have the character, one or both, take into account what they are
doing, they are killing people, its something to think about. this antho isnt
about killing people, its about dealing with death. so its needs to be a little
deeper.
4. when someone says, somethin. you ned to add an ' on it to
replace the G same with em is 'em
if you feel like doing this stuff and sending it again, i dont see
whay i cant use it.
(i didnt edit this email much, i dont bother)
thanks
Let's dissect this point by point.
1. From now on, I will stop beginning words with AND. Andalusia, Andrew, Android and several others have now been stricken from my vocabulary. Not really. Because I believe what this person meant to say was "Stop beginning sentences with 'And'." Wait, why is it never a good thing? As long as conjunctions are used sparingly to start sentences, they are perfectly acceptable. I promise. Don't make me go all Strunk & White on you.
2. Standard dialogue format is wonderful if that's the way your character speaks. This particular character doesn't speak in standard English. In fact, I don't know many people who do. Maybe a few stauncher politicians and members of the clergy. I understand that too much slang can be distracting, but let it go. Feel the character.
3. Perhaps if this editor had finished reading the story, the "dealing with death" would have become clearer...since a death is the climax of the story (and actually is implied rather than described). The characters aren't "killing people." Of course, those things might be difficult to glean from just scanning. That got me thinking about how many stories are rejected by editors who don't do their job and read the entire thing top to bottom. And then I felt my blood pressure rising, so I stopped thinking about it. Must...keep...beast...at...bay.
4. Adding an apostrophe when dropping a letter or letters from a word is the writer's choice. I understand that doing so is standard (something this person seems to adamantly uphold), yet it is not required. Just ask a guy named Steve King. Or Cormac McCarthy. Or Bernard Shaw. Me, I prefer a page uncluttered with throwaway punctuation. Still unconvinced? Check out this article, paying close attention to the paragraph labeled "Omission and elision."
5. The penultimate sentence tops everything. Let me get this straight: I am expected to revise my story to make it more standard, but this editor can't be bothered to employ correct spelling, punctuation, grammar, or mechanics? If you don't have the inclination to be professional, then I can see I have wasted time submitting.
I'd love to hear your thoughts on this, writers. Editors, feel free to weigh in as well. Am I off the mark here? Writers who submit to markets learn quickly that they need editors far more than editors need them and that anything percieved as bitterness toward editors comes off as unprofessional. Well, I'm bucking that trend today. Because there are certainly some editors we writers do not need. And (uh-oh, there's that pesky coordinating conjunction starting my sentence again) I'm not bitter in the slightest. Just appalled.
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Monday, May 7, 2012
Baby Gravy
Hi, folks. Long time, no?
Just here for a brief youtube share. What follows is a humorous clip of a baby discussing breakfast options. Enjoy a quick chuckle today!
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nO1YNF1EePY
Just here for a brief youtube share. What follows is a humorous clip of a baby discussing breakfast options. Enjoy a quick chuckle today!
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nO1YNF1EePY
Wednesday, February 22, 2012
Excerpt
What follows is an excerpt from a forthcoming horror novella entitled Snowfall. I hope you enjoy. Feel free to leave feedback.
Which is the wind that brings the cold?
The North Wind, Freddy, and all the snow;
And the sheep will scamper into the fold
When the North begins to blow.
-- Edmund Clarence Stedman, "What the Winds Bring"
Snowfall
By Aaron Gudmunson
Which is the wind that brings the cold?
The North Wind, Freddy, and all the snow;
And the sheep will scamper into the fold
When the North begins to blow.
-- Edmund Clarence Stedman, "What the Winds Bring"
They
came with the snow, or else they brought it with them. No one's clear on that point yet. It doesn't matter. They're here and so are we. None of us are going anywhere. Fourteen inches of snow, according to Shane,
and no sign of it letting up.
I guess it snowed like this back in
1978 or '79. I dunno, I wasn't even born
yet. You would've told me a year ago
snowfall like this was possible, I would've called you a liar to your
face.
But the snow is the least of our
worries. It's what lives in the snow
that scares me. Mr. Albright says it's
some kind of new species, but he can't know that because he hasn't seen
them. I have. So has the prof. I guess Liz did too, way out in the field,
but it ducked into a snow bank before she could snap a picture with her damn
useless camera phone.
Wait. Let me start from the beginning.
On Tuesday, the sun burned sharp and
bright. Middle of December, thirty
degrees, ground not yet frozen. Everyone
was skeptical when the National Weather Service declared a winter storm
advisory. I was off work that day and
had a bunch of errands to run downtown, Christmas shopping and the like. I kept eyeing the skies after hearing the
weather report and when I called Melanie, I told her I thought it was
bunk.
"No way is it gonna snow
today," I told her.
"You never know," she
replied in that holier-than-thou tone she knows irks the living hell out of
me. God, I would give my right hand to
hear her voice now.
"Weatherman's the only job you
can have and be wrong everyday," I grumbled.
Melanie laughed. "Just don't forget to bring home
butter. Real butter, not that Country
Crock gunk. I'm making cookies for the
Gallagher's Christmas party."
"Shit. Forgot about that. Do I need to get them something?"
"Never fear, love. I picked up a token present."
"God love ya, Mel." We said good-bye, then I went into the
hardware store to buy a new hammer to replace the one I busted last month. I was pretty sure Mel got me one for
Christmas, but she didn't know to get the right kind. It's the thought that counts, but not when it
comes to my tools.
Arch's Market was busy, packed with
business pros looking for a turkey sub and housewives picking up a rotisserie
chicken and half a pound of red potato salad.
I considered a bee-line to the butter, one and done, out the door, but
decided last second on a quick detour through Arch's liquor department. I glanced over the bottles of wine and
selected a Merlot with a picture of some pink flower on it; I've never been a
big connoisseur of the stuff. Then, with
a quick about-face, I yanked open the beer cooler and grabbed a six-pack of
Amstel. Beer, on the other hand, I
connoisseur just fine.
I bustled through the checkout with a clear
intention of going straight home. I
really did. Unfortunately, the route
home took me right past McGavin's (I could have taken Seventh over to Highland,
which was the most direct route). But driving
by McGavin's, all the way out on Red Pointe Road, had become a habit with
me. I wanted to see who was there.
"If I don't see any car I know,
I'll go right home," I said aloud, trying to convince myself. But right there, first slot, was Shane Dodd's
F-150. Of course it was. We had the day off.
I wheeled my Tahoe in beside him and
sat for a second looking through the windshield. Then I killed the engine and got out.
Herb McGavin had opened the bar in
1996, over the ruins of another tap of which I can't quite recall the
name. I was just a kid then. The place was damn near perfect in every way
a bar should be: dim, smoke-mirrored, old-timey brass register, country-western
on the juke. And, of course, good
booze. I loved it. And over the past couple years, Herb and his
wife Darla and I had become buddies. All
his employees knew my name.
At the door, I turned and scanned
the road, pretending to be watching the weather. Both road and sky were gray and empty. The field beyond, which grew corn in warmer
months, grew nothing now but the remains of the season's first snowfall. The gravel lot, at this hour on a Friday,
held only two other vehicles; Shane's and Herb's. In the next few hours, it would fill up quick:
payday.
On a whim, I stood on tiptoe and
plucked down an icicle from the awning over the door and pitched it toward the
road. It flung end over end and stuck
point-down in a snow bank on the far side.
With a self-satisfied smile, I opened the door and stepped inside.
#
"Benjamin
Clary, ladies and gentlemen! The
Drinkmaster hisself has arrived!" Shane announced to no one as I copped
the stool beside his. "Old lady let
you out to play?" he asked, tipping his bottle of Budweiser to his
lips. He shook his head and laughed
before I could reply. "Hell no she
ain't. I know Melanie."
"Out Christmas shopping. Just stopped in for one or two," I said
lamely. Who was I fooling? Certainly not Shane, who just laughed and
shook his head again.
Herb stepped over, wiping his hands on a dish towel
that might've been clean yesterday or the day before. "What can I getcha, Benny?" Herb
asked. He was playing barkeep now while
it was slow. Once the place got good and
jumping, he'd leave that menial task to Liz or Dale (maybe both, if the place
got really crazy) while he vanished into his upstairs office to count the loot
rolling in.
I ordered a Bud and stared up at the plasma TV
above the bar. The news was playing
footage of a train derailment in downstate Cass County. Heavy snow was falling on the rescue workers
who were diligently digging in the rubble.
"Shit, it is gonna snow here today," Herb
said, also watching the screen.
"Naw. Cass
County's a hundred miles south of here," I said.
"Seventy-five, southwest," Shane
corrected. "If it's snowing there
now, we've got maybe half an hour before we start seeing the white stuff. And it looks like a helluva a lot of the
white stuff, too."
I still didn't buy it, which was based more on wishful
thinking than actual meteorological evidence, because when I checked the plate
glass window at the front of the bar the sky had taken on a steelier cast. Maybe Mel and Shane were right. Maybe we were in for a winter storm. In the hours to come, I would curse my idiocy
in talking myself out of heading home early.
Shane and I made idle talk about the bitch of working
winter construction, though we were happy to have work at all. A lot of the guys had been laid off already,
but the boss had kept us on because Shane and I are worth our salt. Half those other guys, they talk more than
they swing a hammer like they should be TV announcers or some shit
instead.
The door yawned open, bringing with it a breath of icy
air, and a middle-age guy with longish gray hair stepped in. A pair of silver specs hung low on his
biggish nose and two days' worth of stubble clung to his cheeks. Probably a professor from the community
college over in Somerville. He wore an
L.L. Bean windbreaker and khakis with honest-to-God penny loafers on his
tootsies. Apparently Professor Stick-Up-The-Rump
also didn't suspect enough snow to warrant wearing galoshes. Either that, or he wasn't planning on going
anywhere anytime soon. My initial
assessment that this guy was a college professor would prove true, but my
initial assessment that he was a total loser douchebag would prove wrong. In the next hours, the prof would become my
best friend.
He took a stool at the end of the bar and ordered a
draft. Herb poured Old Style into a
frosted mug and slid it down the bar with a practiced flick of the wrist. He was always showing off like that.
The guy caught it just as deftly, lifted the glass
high, and said, "Bravo."
Shane leaned over and whispered, "Shit, Benny,
look at the fairy who just fluttered in."
I laughed and clinked bottles with my friend. It was the last time we'd laugh together
before Shane was dead.
Herb changed the channel to the
Bulls-Heat game which had just tipped off.
"You takin bets today, Herbert?" Shane called.
"Call it quick afore someone
scores," Herb replied.
"Ten on Miami. Paper says they give up six-and-a-half."
"I'll take that action,"
Herb said, then looked at me.
"Benny?"
I shook my head. "Mel'd be pissed if she knew I was here,
but she'd go absolutely nuclear if she found out I'd been betting."
"Pussy-whipped," Shane
said to no one in particular, cocking a thumb at me.
"Fuck off."
"Shouldn't you be headed home,
lover-boy? Eventually your lady's gonna
figure out where you're at."
"I got time for another
round."
"Or two?"
"Or two," I concurred. Melanie was pre-occupied with holiday plans
and honestly wanted some time to herself to plan them. That worked out well for me. Of course, she would be wanting the butter
I'd purchased at Arch's for baking the cookies, but there was still time. That's what I kept telling myself.
The door opened again and in came
Liz and Dale together. They were
laughing. Liz was five and a half feet
of brunette beauty, slim waist, full blouse, ass round and firm like two
hemispheres of a broken globe. Her eyes
sparkled like emeralds and her teeth were white as the snow Shane insisted was
coming. In other words, hot.
Dale stood a foot taller than his
co-barkeep, a wall of muscle and stubble.
He was nice enough to his patrons until they got a bit rowdier than Herb
liked, at which point he would show them the door…often by force. Definitely not a guy to fuck with. The fact that he and Liz were fucking was
apparent to everyone but Herb, who discouraged intimate relationships among his
employees. (He'd confessed this to me
one late night while just he and I occupied the bar, doing shot after shot of
Jose Cuervo chased with Amstels. The
reason being that he'd met Darla the same way, while they worked together, and
he knew the kind of trouble work relationships could cause. "Benny ole boy," he'd said,
clapping me jovially on the shoulder, "I ever catch my people diddling on
my dime, I'll fire the whole damn crew.")
I eyed Liz as Dale took her coat and
hung it up on the rack beside the door.
He said something to her and she giggled, her eyes wide and dewy as
flower petals on a fine May morning. How
Herb couldn't see the facts of their relationship was beyond me.
"Ben! Shane!
What are you boys doing here so early on a workday?" Liz called as
she spotted us.
"That's the problem,
gorgeous. No work in the winter for
hammer-swingin dicks like us," Shane replied. "Sucks ass."
"So you decided to come drink
your abbreviated paychecks away?
Here?" Dale asked, taking his place behind the bar. He tucked a clean dish towel into his back
pocket, which would slowly become saturated with draft dregs and cocktail
leavings as the night wore on; it was a staple of his attire that I would
eventually use to stop blood flowing from his severed femoral artery.
"Actually, I should get
going," I said, knowing someone would stop me and that I would let
them. Ah, the trappings of alcoholism.
Dale held up a hand. "And leave half that Bud behind? That's alcohol abuse."
"I chug this, I'm gone," I
insisted. "Melanie's going to kill
me if I miss the damn Gallagher's Christmas party tonight."
Liz sidled up to Dale behind the
bar, their hips bumping. "You still
with her?" she asked.
Shane clapped me on the
shoulder. "You kiddin? Benny-boy's always gonna be with Mel. They're like buggy whips and buggies."
"Aw.
That's so cute," Liz said.
Her voice carried an edge of something I couldn't decipher. My pulse quickened.
"Yeah, those crazy kids been
together since high school, what, eight years now?" Shane said.
"Something like that," I
mumbled. I wanted to change the subject,
so I said, "Hey, I bought a new hammer today. Dude, you should see it."
"Day off work and guy can't stop
talking shop," Shane said to the staff of McGavin's, who chuckled
obligingly. He loved an audience.
"You wanna see it or what? I could use a smoke."
"Bring it back with you. I'm just getting comfy," Shane said,
eyeing Liz who'd just turned around to start the opening count of her
till. He took another sip of beer. "Oh, and give that piece of shit of
yours a good kick in the tailpipe for me."
Shane piously followed the Word of Ford; I was devoutly Chevy.
I went out to my Tahoe and looked at
the sky. It was still gray and overcast,
but not a single snowflake graced the air.
It would take more than Shane's amateur meteorological read and live
footage from Cass County to change my mind about impending snow. I glanced across the road and noted the
icicle I'd tossed still stood there like a glass monument in a vast white
desert. It glowed red in the last light
of day.
I smoked, then opened the Tahoe's
passenger door. On the seat were two
bags, one from Arch's and one from Ace. I
thought of the butter butted up against the beer in the first one. The butter Mel needed to finish her damned
Gallagher Christmas cookies. She'd be
calling soon if I didn't get my ass home.
I grabbed the second bag, felt the weight of the tool
inside. It never diminished, the feel of
a hammer in a practiced hand. I'd been
slinging one since high school and probably would the rest of my life. I was fine with that. I'd even gotten over the way some people
looked down their noses at people like Shane and me, manual laborers languishing
at the bottom of their pyramid. Doctors,
lawyers, CEOs. I built their houses and
fine-dining restaurants. I built the
schools their snot-nosed kids attended.
I built their office buildings and country clubs. Basically, I built their lives.
I took the hammer inside and laid it
on the bar in front of Shane. He looked
away from the Bulls game and his eyes widened.
"Holy Jeezly Christopher, Benny.
This fucker's a TiBone." He
hefted it, bringing it to head-level and swinging it in a controlled arc. "Eighteen ounce?"
"Fifteen," I replied,
pleased with Shane's awe.
"Contoured handle, ergonomic grip.
Solid titanium. Best hammer
Stiletto makes."
"Shit, this is the nicest-ass
hammer I ever fingered."
"I thought so too. Early Christmas present to myself. I deserve it."
"If this didn't dry up your
holiday bonus, I'll shit a nickel."
"Got it with room to
spare. You should snag one."
"Gonna have to now. Can't have the guys thinking you're better'n
me."
We laughed and drank and watched the
game. The hammer sat between our bottles
on the bar.
#
More
people filed in as afternoon drew on toward evening. Guys from the forge, mostly, still wearing
their work boots and a layer of sweat, but also a few from the plastic factory out
on Route 23. I spotted Dennis Goodin, my
postal carrier, slip in and grab a corner booth with a female companion. If we were lucky, we'd be treated to a few
sorority sweethearts from the university twenty miles west. Not the community college in Sommerville;
those were all commuter students who came from towns like Murdoch and
Hogan. But every once in a while the odd
carload of hotties would make the trip from the university to do a little
Friday night line dancing. They'd come
in wearing pink cowgirl hats and nylon plaid shirts and blue jeans tight enough
to show off their assets.
I knew I should be heading
home. I knew that Melanie would be showering
now, getting ready for the party. If she
wasn't already dressed and waiting for me. I checked my cell for missed calls,
but there were none. I should call
her, I thought.
But then Derrick Rose executed a
reverse two-handed dunk to take the lead and I screamed along with the rest of
the bar.
Outside, the sun was sinking toward
the horizon and the first flakes of snow began to fall.
Copyright © 2012 by Aaron Gudmunson. All rights reserved.
Saturday, November 12, 2011
On God and Politics Redux
Hello, folks. It's been some time since I last posted, but I assure you it is with good reason. I'm currently participating in National Novel Writing Month and have been devoting all writing time to that project. I thought I'd take a second and voice another concern about some of the people making a push for the presidency in next year's election.
A while ago, I posted a blog about Republican presidential candidate Michele Bachmann stating she was prompted to run for office by God. Yes, the God. Now we can add Herman Cain into the mix of nutjobs who claim the same. I won't rehash the same argument I presented in the previous post because there's really not anything else to be said on the matter except this: beware the folks who claim God spoke to them, especially if said folks are making a run for the sun at the most powerful position in the world. I mean, talk about self-importance. Talk about lack of accountability. Talk about psychosis. Talk about terrifying.
This is the 21st century. Are we still happily and blindly playing these games? Do people actually believe these candidates had the God whispering His blessing into their ears? If so, I should be a millionaire from all the bridges I can sell. Any candidate who makes this claim automatically and irrevocably loses my vote -- and the vote of any rational thinker -- forever.
That's it. End of mini-rant. Leave feedback as you like and I'll see you at the end of November.
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Monday, October 31, 2011
Top 5 Classic Scary Tales
Hello folks! 'Tis the season for scares, am I right? The time when witches reign, goblins maraude, and ghouls creep forth to feed. Graves yawn wide to retch up their residents and myriad monsters loom within the periphery. We mere mortals are at the mercy of villainy and mischievousness far and wide. What are we to do but review the scariest stories and legends of all time? Let's get down to business, if you dare. Links to full text of each work are provided. I recommend readings in full.
5. "The Masque of the Red Death" by Edgar Allan Poe (1842). After the titular pandemic decimates his populace, Prince Prospero gathers a thousand of his closest friends and shuts them off from the rest of the world until the disease burns itself out. He throws a bash for the ages, setting up seven royal suites to host his masquerade ball. Unfortunately, an uninvited guest makes his(?) way into the midst of the revelers and even more unfortunately bears the infection of the Red Death. Poe's story is rich in symbolism, using color and sensory images to expand the horror. One of the eeriest stories you'll ever run your eyes across.
4. "The Legend of Sleepy Hollow" by Washington Irving (1820). Who among us is unfamiliar with the lanky pedagogue Ichabod Crane and Brom Bones, his rabble-rousing arch-rival for the hand of Katrina van Tassel? When in doubt about losng your beloved to the newcomer in town, resort to trickery...which is exactly what Bones does. The Headless Horseman is one of the most beloved monsters in literature and with good reason. Am I wrong?
3. "The Monkey's Paw" by W.W. Jacobs (1902). Be careful what you wish for is the moral of this story. A talisman traded, a wish desired, an unexpected payment. All the makings of a classic and enduring horror story.
2. "Young Goodman Brown" by Nathaniel Hawthorne (1835). Set during the Salem witch trials, our hero encounters in a dark forest bizarre people (a dangerous stranger) and events (a witch's Sabbath) that lead him to distrust his new wife, his religion, and humanity in general. Scary stuff for the faithful.
1. "The Turn of the Screw" by Henry James (1898). Perhaps the best ghost story ever written, this novella leans on ambiguity and turn of phrase to frame its narrative. The story centers on siblings Miles and Flora left in custody of their uncle who has no interest in raising them and leaves the duty to a housekeeper who sees strange apparitions about the grounds of the estate. Spooky stuff ensues.
So do you think I've got it nailed? What did I miss? Happy Samhain, all!
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Saturday, October 22, 2011
Not Delilah
Good afternoon, everyone. With Halloween rapidly approaching, I thought I would share a scary little tidbit I wrote a few years back for a college course. Enjoy.
Look, I’m no mystic. I don’t buy into portents and potions or psychics and spirits. Nostradamus was a primitive John Edward, delivering to his audience a bunch of hokey hocus and cold-reading rhetoric, having no more “vision” than a sun-blinded bat. I’m pretty open-minded on most issues, and I certainly subscribe to the preternatural world (you’d have to be a jerk not to), but let’s be realistic about it. There are things that exist outside the human realm of experience – a new species, for example, is discovered on our planet virtually every day – but you have to draw the line somewhere.
Look, I’m no mystic. I don’t buy into portents and potions or psychics and spirits. Nostradamus was a primitive John Edward, delivering to his audience a bunch of hokey hocus and cold-reading rhetoric, having no more “vision” than a sun-blinded bat. I’m pretty open-minded on most issues, and I certainly subscribe to the preternatural world (you’d have to be a jerk not to), but let’s be realistic about it. There are things that exist outside the human realm of experience – a new species, for example, is discovered on our planet virtually every day – but you have to draw the line somewhere.
My motto is this: if it’s tangible, it’s possible. Faith? Faith is like rhythm – you either have it or you don’t. It can be learned, but then it takes on a certain awkwardness and the learner never quite dances just right. It’s simply not natural.
May, 1998. It rained that morning. I awoke to it pattering against the window above my bed. Nice way to wake up; far better than a bleating alarm clock. I showered, washed and conditioned the long locks of my grunge-rock hair, dressed, and went about my day. In the interim, something was growing. A feeling. A premonition, maybe, as I came to believe. Something was wrong. But isn’t that the understatement of the century? Something was horribly, hideously, fatally off beam. As that spring day in 1998 wore on, I was filled with a nameless, sickening dread blossoming like some poisonous flower. I tried uselessly to ignore it.
At work, I smiled and gave customers their totals before bidding them come again. I half-expected one to morph into a disfigured creature and begin pillaging the store and its patrons. But none did. That nameless dread just continued to unfurl until its noxious pollination threatened to suffocate me.
At home that evening, my head was swimming. After band practice, I retired to my room and strummed my acoustic guitar for an hour or so. I listened through the wall to Rob, my friend and bandmate, try to negotiate a date for Friday with a nice young woman he'd met at a show. Jared, the singer, was uncharacteristically quiet, staring at the evening news without so much as blinking. I decided to take a walk to clear my head. Jared called for me to wait up and asked if he could tag along.
It was not my intention to tell him anything for fear he’d think me senseless. It's bad enough that he was the guy who got to speak into the microphone on his soapbox at each gig; I didn't need to give him something else to sound off on. But he was quiet on that night walk, which led nowhere. We mumbled banalities of class and whether or not we should move the bridge up a few bars in the new song we'd written. We watched the sidewalk slip beneath our feet. The stars revolved and the trees shook and the smell of rain rinsed the wind. Eventually, the conversation broke when I said, "Do you feel that?"
And he said, "Yeah."
Someone had died. Or perhaps an Antichrist was born. Even now, I have not the barest hint of what it could have been, only that something large and terrible had happened. Was happening. I sensed it the way a stallion senses the approaching tempest a hundred miles west, and stomps a helpless hoof in reply. Somewhere, something had reached its tipping point and Jared and I both felt it.
April, 1996. It really began with the dreams. Nightmares pulsing with the vividness of dawn were nightly born behind my eyes. These monstrous displays could not be tethered to mere invention on my behalf – I did not sire them. They were sent. I know this as I know my middle name replicates my father's first.
No, these were warnings. Must have been. Never before or since have my nocturnal manufacturings crackled with such surging energy. They were living things. I can recall each sliver of detail down to the final agonized scream. I could not bear to relate them here outside of a few brief glimpses; nor would expect you, reader, to shoulder their weight (for one day you may have no choice). Suffice to know that they were apocalyptic in nature: global ruination. Our demise will not come about by the wreckage of war or the demolition ball of a marauding meteor; it comes about through…
…an explosion. Somewhere, far to the south, something blows sky high. My hair is cropped close to the skull, and saturated with sweat. I am stalking through the remains of a building, gutted by some long-gone fire. The walls are scorched and smell of cordite. The ceiling is gone and the sky outside is purple-tinged. I am carrying an assault rifle. Though I've never touched one before, I know how to use it. I breathe soot. Somewhere behind me issue the calls of men in pursuit. I am hunted.
Weaving through the labyrinthine corridors, I find myself at a dead end. No exit, except the way I came – which is, of course, blocked. In the center of the room sits a young girl. She is crying. When she sees me, she gains her feet and, sobbing, wobbles forward. She stretches out her arms, seeking comfort I cannot offer.
"I want my mommy," she whispers, sniffling.
I tell her I can't help her.
"I want my mommy!"
I tell her to hush and shoot a glance toward the dimming corridor.
"I want my MOMMY!" the child shrieks and before I know what I'm doing, I shoulder the rifle and trigger off a volley. Fire spits from the muzzle. Five shell casings bounce at my feet. The girl is lifted from the force and tossed against the wall before crumpling to a pile of rags.
Sickened, I peer wildly around. There are only shadows, and shadows upon shadows. There is only the lingering ghost of damnation. I start back the way I came, knowing it is useless. And then I hear it.
"I want my mommy," the voice chokes. It is calmer now, but drowned. I turn, and the gun drops from nerveless fingers. The girl is renegotiating her feet. She is not dead, though her hair is now a straw mat of blood and her face is gone. "I want my mommy," she says again and takes a tentative step toward me, stretching her arms in embrace.
Ok, let me explain before you label me crazy. According to the latest reports, America 's population has now topped 300 million. China and India already have us beat, each exceeding 1 billion souls. Global pop is doubling roughly every 50 years, by conservative estimates. What the dreams were showing me was simply the consequences of expanding unchecked. An explosion.
What happens, according to these visions, is this: humanity's growth accelerates so rapidly that resources are soon exhausted. We need more food to support more people, but we now have require so much housing that habitable structures are built on the only land left available – the rich soil needed to raise our foodstock. Essentially, we choke off our food supply with housing. And then it happens: total collapse. People outnumber usable resources, equaling mass starvation, famine, disease, rioting. It's ugly. And I already see its precursors. They're everywhere. Two hundred acres of cornfield near my in-laws were paved over last year to put up a subdivision. A local forest was leveled in favor of a shopping mall. The government subsidized my uncle's farm for a friendly fee and put him out of work. We're simply burning ourselves out and, for some reason, I was allowed a small sampling of the end result.
There is a lake with a car sinking into it. The car is red, compact. It belongs to my friend Jared, and he is still inside. He does not move. He is not singing now. He is smiling. The captain, going down with the ship. He remains oblivious to my frantic screams to save himself. He doesn't care, because everyone is going down with the ship. The big cabin cruiser S.S. Earth is capsizing and no amount of bailing will save its passengers now.
As the radio aerial slips beneath the surface, I watch the concentric rings of water ripple out and away, a fading bulls-eye. For a time, I watch the surface where that target floated, willing my friend to rise. Willing him to change his mind and rejoin me in what is left of this world. But he does not, and I leave this tortured gravesite scrubbing a hand through my devastated hair.
After the dreams, I vowed never to cut my hair. Since all these visions displayed me sans ponytail, I figured that if I kept my hair long indefinitely, none of these terrors would befall the world. What psychiatrists would, I suppose, label rationalization. But maybe I was like Samson. Just maybe I carried not only my strength, but the strength of the world in the winding strands of hair. If I chose to preserve it, I could preserve the world; save it from the suffering I knew was coming.
Like Samson, though, I lost the hair because of a girl. Her name was not Delilah and she did not wield the shears. After an arduous breakup, she began dating a rival. Out of a desperate need for change, I cut the hair off. In my defense, the fate of the world was the farthest thing from my mind that winter; I didn't give it a single passing thought as I trooped into the barber, sat down, and ordered: "Take it off. All of it." So, if these portents ever emerge, you may blame the destruction of the world on a woman whose name is not Delilah.
The city is nearly empty. Winds hush down vacant alleys. Automobiles rust along the curbs. It is dark, except for certain places where the few remaining inhabitants have scrounged generators to light the quiet places of this necropolis. At the top of a skyscraper, I survey what remains. On the wall of the penthouse, someone has scrawled a message in mud or blood or excrement: ALL DEAD HERE.
But not all.
Boots scrape on the rust-flaked fire escape. Still they pursue me, though now I am unarmed. The breeze stirs their voices away and riffles the hood over my scalp. I wait until a gloved hand appears over the lip of the roof, then start down the opposing side. When I reach the ground, a cat with a torn ear hisses at me from atop an overturned garbage can. I flee into the streets of a city acrawl with silence.
I'm aware this is melodramatic and probably a load of bunk. I'm no scientist. Humanity's not about to collapse under its own weight. Mother Nature won't retaliate by striking down two-thirds of the world population. Global warming's a myth devised by men in suits to keep us subservient. AIDS has been contained. The Greenhouse Effect is certainly not melting the ice caps and the world is definitely not lorded over by a shadow government. It's all scaremongering, propaganda, new age-y rubbish. Dreams are dreams and don't mean anything beyond their surface luster. The exploding population is by no means an issue worthy of attention and strength is not carried in a lock of hair. As long as we're all comfortable in our two-bedroom homes, eating our sushi, raising our 2.5 kids, and taking our Chinese pugs out for walks, we'll be okay.
It's not a prison cell, really. It's a prison suite. There is a fire crackling on an antique hearth. A queen-sized bed with a down comforter sprawls in the corner. There is a television and a radio (both worthless because there is nothing now to broadcast), and a desk with a candle where I can write.
I'm not exactly sure why I'm in custody; the days of Miranda are long gone. I'm to be tried sometime in the near future and a guilty verdict will undoubtedly lead to execution. I kneel on the woven rug before the fireplace and peer into its depths as if the flames will hold the answers. As if anything holds any answers. The door unlatches and my hood stirs in the breeze from the corridor and I stand to meet my fate.
"Aaron," says a voice, familiar. It is Rob, whom I believed dead, victim to the initial catastrophe which claimed so many lives. He has joined the other side (whatever that side may represent), and has traded in his drums for an assault rifle. Rob and I embrace, then he stands aside to let me pass. He has come not to kill me but to free me. The corridor leads to an exit and I take it, out, into the night.
We all still have an exit, I'm sure, though I don't know if we'll have a friendly steward to open it for us. We'll have to open it ourselves. We needn't blindly fumble for the latch. We need merely open our eyes and see.
Which is what I'm attempting. Since that night those years ago, when I felt the nauseous dread of something amiss, I've come to understand we are doomed unless we do something to initiate a reversal. Our ship is sinking and we are all unwilling captains.
I've gone so far as to try to grow my hair out again, but it doesn't seem to work. It's thinner now, and weaker. Or maybe it's the stuff its rooted in that is not conducive to growth. Perhaps the brain has grown soft and clayey, porous and silty, and no longer rich with the topsoil of thought and ambition. Perhaps all it can do now is grow dreams that disguise themselves as visions and visions that disguise themselves as dreams.
And speaking of dreams, I'll leave you now with a final sample. The last of those pseudo-prophetic reveries that plagued me that decade past:
On the bank of a river, far from any vestige of humanity, I watch the water whirl south in spits and eddies. A reflection appears over my shoulder and I turn, startled, certain my relentless pursuers must have at last caught up with me despite Rob's head start. However, though this newcomer walks upright, he is not a pursuer (or even human). It is a dog. Its legs have evolved to hold its entire form erect, and it seems particularly proud of this achievement. Its center of gravity has shifted. It wears a purple cloak and a leering grin. I get no sense of danger from it. For a long while we watch one another; I swallow and it licks its chops.
At last I manage, "Have you come for me?"
"Mm-hm," it answers.
"Are you going to help me?"
"Mm-hm," it replies.
"Can you show me the way?"
"Mm-hm," for the third time.
…the dreams vanish in a wisp and I am released from their burdening yoke. So where does this leave us? As I've said, I'm no mystic, I'm no scientist, and I'm surely no interpreter of dreams. Who really knows what the resurrected girl, the sinking car, the pursuit, the release from captivity, the dog speaking in indefinite affirmations truly mean? How much strength can hair really hold in its slim follicle? How dangerous is a population that rises unchecked? How much damage can global warming really do? Who knows?
I can really only glean two things from this mess: a) I experienced a rash of nightmares in the spring of 1996 and b) I experienced a bout of malaise in the spring of 1998. Beyond that, what can I tell you? I'm no prophet.
("Not Delilah" originally published in Withersin, April 2009. Revised and expanded 2011. All rights reserved. Images copyright by respective owners, used by permision per terms of wikimedia.com)
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